In this blog post I will be evaluating the final edit of my TV pilot, looking at what I need to improve and what I should do next time. I will break down my evaluation into sections, looking at one scene at a time. You can find the link to my edit here on youtube:
I feel that the opening shot of my short film was a good decision in establishing where the surface is supposed to be in relation to the TV series. It also is a much better opening shot compared to Gael sleeping in his sleeping bag. For the opening shot I took a quick snippet from the book of eli trailer showing the trees, this was meant to be the landscape of the surface. I then did a dip to black showing a clip of a crow from a wildlife program flying away. I then colour corrected the crow clip to match the colour of the rest of the film. I thought this was a good opener, showing the surface that the characters keep referring to. With also being the setting for the tone.
The opening scene even though it was done in a rush condition, I feel it still works. If we would have had more time maybe we would have been able to iron out the continuity errors due to having more time on our hands. It would have also been able to make the conversation more visually interesting.
I feel that for this scene the lighting works really well. Having it seem dim light but also still being able to fully see the actor’s faces. This creates the tone of the film whilst also not hurting it. The audio works fine I feel, showing the viewer that the area is quite echoey whilst still getting the actor’s performances recorded.
Market walking scenes
We had two market walking scenes, showing the transition from the market back to the corridor scenes. I feel like these scenes are the weakest of the short film, due to the fact that the shots even though are interesting get pretty boring after a bit of time. However I feel that the audio really helped with this scene, having different music for different locations.
This was enable to happen thanks to the fact that Joe, our sound recordist, was recording when we were just walking through the streets of Camden. This meant we got lots of different background to use for the different shots, adding the atmosphere of the scene. I feel to improve these scene we maybe would have prepared more, rather than just filming randomly where we were walking. Having more of a set layout, with also trying to get different variation of shots. I also feel that this holds up the pacing of the short film, making it go as smoothly or build up the tension as much as I wanted it to.
This is something that I will have to focus more on. Making sure that the scene transitions happen smoothly with also having good pacing to make the viewer bored or confused on what going on.
Food conversation scene
I feel that this gave a good break up from the mold of having lots of tracking and medium shots. With having shot reverse shot of a conversation taking place. This also gave me experience in doing this type of scene, as of before I had no real experience with shooting a conversation scene.
I feel that audio be could have been improved, however I feel I did the best I can. This was due to the fact that we were recording next to a speaker playing different songs. This meant that there were different songs in background for each of the takes. Saying this though I feel that I managed to not get much discretion with the audio side. Having one track of audio playing music from Cadem, managing to be louder than the music but not louder than the actors speaking.
“Fight,” final scene
The final scene was my most concerned about scene, due to the fact that there was so many people involved and we had to try and fact a fight of sorts. This was especially hard when filming for me. Due to the fact that I am not as confident as most people, I had to direct 5 actors and a camera man whilst also making sure to record sound. This hard for making sure to put everyone in the correct place for shooting. However saying this I feel that the scene worked out good, I feel that this has giving me great experience in directing a small group of people. Rather than just one or two.
I feel that this scene works really well due to fact that I feel it has the tone of the show, if it was going to made into a full length TV show. Having good lighting with also some really good performances. Having the dynamic of the height between Nathan and Daniel was a really good decision, because it brings over the menacing factor a lot more.
However I feel that there should have a bit more of a build up to the indiecent, building up the tension and suspense. This I feel is an issue with the overall pacing of the film rather than just this scene.
Overall I feel that I am really proud of this short film, feeling its probably the most ambitious short film that I have taken part in. Having to source the locations and then get a small production group together. In terms of improving skills I feel that I have a lot sound. That both with actually recording the sound making sure that we can easily sync in post. With also actually doing sound design with the different audio clips, making the world feel more lived in and adding to the audience’s experience.
The most important thing I will take away from this project is that I need to not be afraid to be firm and take control as a director. Making sure that everyone knows what they are doing at all times. So the film can be made efficiently and with also not having any hiccups on how I envisioned it. I will be showing my edit to my other classmates later this week for a group crit. Where the other members in my group could also see for the first time what I have done with my version of the edit.