The final evaluation

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The skills I have learnt from doing the FMP

In this blog I will briefly be talking about skills I have developed over the course of the FMP, separating it into sections for the pre, production and post production. I will be talking about how I got better at this skills, and what I did to improve them. I will also talk more in depth about this in the Evaluation.

Pre Production

For the pre production I feel that the number one skill I learnt was problem solving. Managing to change my idea mid planning and come up with a new idea that will fit the project brief. I felt that this experience will prepare me for when I go on into the film industry where I would have to keep changing things to do with film. Due to problems out of my control. Such as budget costs or time pressures.

I feel that this would also help with when I do a second FMP. For example if anything happens where I have to change my idea, I will be able to change my idea quickly to adapt to the situation.


For production I feel that I have learnt new skills such as filming in different frame rates and managing to get to grips with the collating shutter speeds. I had to change the shutter speed to 100 when filming due to the fact that I shooting in 50 fps, this was because I wanted most of the footage to be in slow motion. This will mean if I wanted to film slow motion again I will know what to do, and I won’t have to research it. This also means if I am improvising when filming, I can film something in slow mo on the off hand. Not restricting myself as much when filming.

I also got generally better at working a DSLR. Managing the exposure carefully, making sure that the iso isn’t too high. This means that when I go to filming I can be more efficient at when getting a shot prepared, with it being in different locations with different scenes.

With reflection I feel that this project has given me great practice with how to work a DSLR. Being able to be independent with filming shots and not having to rely on people to help set up the shot, or making sure that I have got the right settings. This will help with future projects, being able to do the job more efficiently and under smaller time periods and bigger pressures. Enabling it to feel more natural when filming.

Post Production

I feel that out of the three post production is the section where I have improved the most in my practical skills. Having to research new effects and also doing colour correction to my work to improve the look and feel.

I have learnt new ways of creating an retro super 8 film, over a HD clip. This will mean in the future I can experiment with this technique more and use it more in my films in the future. I have also got to grips with after effects for the first time, this being the first time I used after effects in a short film. This means that when I use to again I can be more efficient and use to greater effect.

In reflection I feel that experimenting with these effects means that I can now be more confident in trying out new things in the future. Being more efficient and wanting to try more in after effects. Trying to make my films better by trying out new things in after effects that I previously wouldn’t if it weren’t for my FMP.

Next time however I have learnt that I should maybe leave more time, maybe a whole week, for after effects. As its quite time consuming and in order to make it look really good you must spend a fair amount of time on it. Added to this I should also research how long it will actually take to perform the task in the pre production stage. As this would give me a more accurate calendar of what will happen during completing my final major project.


Overall I feel that this project has made me much more constant in my working, having a much more efficient work ethic towards film making. I feel that my pre production has came along well, giving me practise in how to problem solve when a situation arises. Having to change my idea due to budget or time consecrates. For production I feel overall skill that has developed was being more flexible when coming to filming different locations and different frame rates. Finally for post production; having the skills to experiment more and being more adaptable when wanting to add new stuff into the edit.

23/05/17 – Focus group with a set of questions, self evaluating and helping a fellow student

Today I showed people my newest rough cut giving them a set of questions to answer after watching the film.

Self evaluation

Before I talk about the focus group questionnaire results, I will be giving a brief of the things I like about the rough cut and also things that I think I should change.

I feel that this rough cut is pretty much finished, feeling that there is isn’t much more to add and having the feeling that I happy with the outcome of the final film. I don’t think editing wise there is much to improve on and I feel that reshooting, there isn’t anything major that ruins the film. Only some of the shots having weak focus, however I don’t feel that this takes massively from the film and will much rather improve my wordpress then go back and reshoot.

However I feel that there is some colour correction left to finish up. Having to make some of the shots look a bit better, mainly the shots with Luc walking with the bike at the beginning. Making sure that they are a bit darker and not as bright. This was mainly because I filmed at 2pm where the light is quite harsh. In reflection I will probably try to aim to film at magic hour times when filming at outside again, so there is good light and no real shadows or bright light. Making the shot harsh.

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I feel also that I did to make the super 8 film more grainy and add more colour correction to it, making sure to have that raw film look. This is due to the fact that you can still tell that it is HD footage and doesn’t give the full illusion of the dream like state. Staying on the topic of Sam’s footage is that of the white flash that appears between reels of films, adding that authentic nature to it. This will also cover up one of the jump cuts in one the shots of Sam walking away.

Overall I feel that the main aspect of my film that I need to change will probably be the colour correction. After that I will be able to export and will be ready for a viewing audience. Tomorrow I will be adding a credits scene, after which on the Thursday and Friday I will be colour correcting whilst adding finishing touches.

Focus group: Questionnaire

I laid out a set of questions for six people to answer. I got people to watch the rough cut and then answer the questions on what they thought of the film. I got people that haven’t seen any of my film or any of the rough cuts I have shown already. This because I wanted a fresh take on the film and if I got people I had for other focus groups, they might of just said the same sort of things.

The questions were:

  1. What’s your general thoughts?
  2. What do you think of the texting scene, anything I need to change (the dialogue for example or the font)?
  3. Is there a scene that went on for too long, or any shots that out stayed their welcome?
  4. What did you think of the 8mm film effect (the effect over the Girlfriend, Sam, shots)?
  5. Is there anything that needs reshooting, or any new scenes that need adding?
  6. Do you like the opening title sequence and shaving scene?
  7. Anything that might need editing out, shots you didn’t like?
  8. Do you like the ending?

The reason for asking these certain questions was because of these are the things that I am most unsure about in the project. I feel that some people may not like the ending, hence why I am asking about the ending and if they like it. I am also worried about if I need to reshoot, making sure that there is any shots that need reshooting.

I will now be looking over what the audience members thought of my project. Giving my brief thoughts on what they said.

Dan – fellow student


Dan managed to notice something that no else did, that being the typo in the text messages. This was good because after all the people I showed my work no one noticed that was the case. So I will be changing the typo whilst also probably picking a different font.

Dan also mentioned to make the super 8 effect stronger. I agree with him on this point and will be making the colour correction stronger and more grainy to really have that super 8/8mm film feel. Making sure that you can’t tell that it is HD footage.

Apart from that Dan didn’t have much to say in terms of negative points or criticism towards the finished film. Which was very pleasing to see. I will make sure to take the advise of making the super 8 effect stronger, having the full effect of the dream state.

Nathan – fellow student


Nathan as well really liked the film. Saying that it was “really great,” giving only a few editing pointers in terms of cuts with the flow of the project. Mentioning that he felt with Sam looking back at the camera and then going on to walk off felt really off and unnatural, not going well with the rest of the film. Not sure if I agree with him on this point and don’t really see a problem with it, I will see how it looks when I place the white flash of the reel change in-between the jump cut. Seeing if changes anything, but I am not sure if I will change the shot.

He also mentioned to me that it might be better to have the ending be him cycling off as the last shot and fade out from there to credits.  I see how this could work, better fitting the music with slow motion cycling. I will have a experiment with this editing technique and see how it looks. If it works I change the ending if it doesn’t I will keep the ending the same and have the last shot of his Mum.

Mark – Teaching Assistant


This is one of the people I have already shown my film to in one of the previous focus groups. Still saying that my film is good he also mentioned how it looks a lot better with the super 8 effect over the footage of Sam. This is good because he has seen both versions, the one without any effects and the one with a super 8 effect. With giving the feedback that it is the super 8 effect was better than the original.

After cutting down the woods scene from his previous focus group advice, Mark still feels that the woods scene could be cut down a little more. I might play around and see if I can without heavily effecting the time of the music with the film.

Tammy – fellow student


Tammy really liked the film, seeing that she pretty much liked every aspect of the film. But had a few criticisms with the sound and the texting effect on the bedroom scene. For the sound she mentioned how the poster rip was very loud compared to the rest of the diegetic sound. I will make sure to lower the sound levels of the poster rip to match the rest of the levels. This was good that she noticed this because otherwise I don’t think I will be able to.

She also mentioned how the bug was a bit distracting from the shot where Luc is smoking. For reference there is a shot with Luc smoking and there is bug on his arm. I feel that I can’t really change this but I can appreciate telling me about it in case I could fix that mistake.

For the advise on the bubbles around I feel that I won’t be taking this advice on board. Due to the fact that, like I have already mentioned, I don’t want the texting to come off cliche or too predictable.

Ethan – fellow student


Ethan pretty much had the same comments as Tammy, saying that the audio with the poster rip should be levelled properly and the bug was a bit distracting in one of the smoking shots. He as well mentioned that the opening scene some of the audio clips were a bit too loud as well, I will have to get some proper headphones to listen to the audio clearly making them all the same level.

Connor Norton (another Connor from the other Conor that I had previously in my other focus group) – fellow student


Connor really liked the music video along with everybody else, saying that it was very good and thought it worked really well. Also mentioning that he agreed with all my creative decisions in the music video. For negative points and ways I could improve he nothing to say, saying that he only wished there was more. This good because this showed that he lost track of time and hasn’t getting bored by the whole experience. As this is the most thing I was unsure about, the length of the project.

Overall thoughts of the focus group

I thought that this focus group was good. As it let me know of any final thoughts of the project. Whilst telling that it was good enough to submit as a final major project. People thoughts were very positive and only a few light criticisms that I could change to lift the project even further.

I will now change I think is good advice and do some final colour correction. To then finally exporting it to be submitted. I am aiming to have it submitted by Wednesday next week. So I can have plenty of time to evaluate, go over my blog post making sure its as good as it can be and get ready for presenting my work in front of the class.

The reason for doing this is so I can get a more focused feedback on what I wanted to know from people. With it being on what I was most scared about at the time. In reflection I feel that I should do this for every section of the FMP. For example having a focus group for the main idea, with having another one for some footage I shot recently unedited. With people saying if I should reshoot.

What I am understanding from reflecting constantly is that I should maybe more constant throughout my work progress. Trying to keep at the same sort of speed constantly and keeping doing things again and again. For example, always having focus groups throughout my progress.

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Today in the last lesson someone needed helping their FMP, so being ahead of schedule I thought I would lend a hand to help him in his project. He was filming his main part of the film and wanted help with the overall shot composition and sound. My job was to wear headphones and make sure that the sound was recording properly. Not needing to hold the boom as it was on a tripod facing towards the person speaking.

I wanted to share this as I feel that sound is my weakness in filmmaking and I feel that any experience will help me in the future when it comes to recording it next time. Making sure to get to grips with the equipment and recording device. I felt that it was a good experience and I liked working in a group when filming the scene. This also helps as I didn’t do much sound recording for my FMP. So this made sure that I had done some sound recording in the space of the FMP.

I will now be talking about the equipment I used for the sound recorder. I used a zoom to record the audio of Fin, this was plugged into a cable which lead to a microphone on a stand.

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This was because Fin was setting at a desk for this scene and wanted to make it like a sort of podcast feel to it. I then had headphones on, plugged into the zoom. Making sure that all sound has recording.

18/05/17 – Editing and experimenting with super 8 film look

After looking over what the focus group gave me as their advice. I have since started to edit my footage again to see what I can change after hearing what they have to say. I have been trying out what advice they gave about the editing, whilst also trying to experiment with the super 8 film look with the footage of Sam. I will be going what I have changed after listening to them. There is a link to my new rough cut below.

New rough cut

I have done a lot of changes to the main structure and pace of the music video. I have taken the general advice from pretty much everyone and shorted the smoking scene down. I have done this by taking some shots of him rolling up the cigarette, but still keeping in the correct timeframe I have replaced that with more of the biking at the start. I feel that this works a lot better as the biking is a lot more enjoyable to watch as a viewer and less able to get bored. I feel that this change works great for the finished product and will keep this in the final part.

I also removed the unpacking of Luc’s sleeping bag shot. Feeling that this wasn’t a great shot and felt unnecessary. So instead I replaced it with another timelapse, this also shows that Luc might have been walking for a long time before sitting down. It is also more impressive than a tripod shot of someone unpacking a bag. I then later added more shots of Luc at the beginning, I feel that this works much better. As it doesn’t just go straight to Sam after the text is received. In reflection I will make sure to get people to actually look over the storyboards and have a focus group more on pre production.

Overall I feel that I have a made a much stronger piece after listening to the advice of other people from the focus group. I feel that the structure and the pace the video goes really well with the music. In reflection I feel that this was the right decision to make a rough cut and have people watch it. As it gave me new fresh ideas to work with.

I feel that I should make the super 8 effect more stronger as you can still tell that it is Hd footage. I feel that maybe adding a pink tint to it will make it so it is more like the Nikes music video that I was inspired by. It will also make much more dream like and have that feeling that he is looking back on the relationship.

I feel that I should look at more of the Luc shots for the bedroom scene, having more of his close up before it goes on to Sam. As I feel that there needs to be a bit longer on Luc’s face as the audience is connecting with him in that moment. I will try and find more clips of his close up and place them in before Sam is introduced. I feel that this will make the film better paced.

I really like the extended bike scene that I placed into the music video, having it go on for longer than previously. I feel that this improves the pacing a lot and makes the film much better for it. It makes it so I can remove some of the smoking shots without the overall time of the film be effected as I am just replacing it with more biking shots.

This makes it so I am the viewer is not drawn out of the film and doesn’t get bored before it ends. The pacing is very important to get right for my film due to it being so long there is a lot of risk that the viewer will get bored and disinterested in the film. So I have to make sure that with focus groups I ask about the pacing if there are scenes that go on for too long.

Super 8 film effect

After experimenting with super 8 effect I feel that it works a lot better with it in. Because of the fact that it creates a much wider contrast between the story and the flashback/dream like footage. It also looks a lot better due to the fact that some of the footage was blurry and this effect hides that better.

The reason I wanted to place this effect in was to show the audience that it is some sort of dream like place, or the footage is fully in reality. This makes it a lot better and makes sense as every time this footage appears its after a close up of Luc thinking. In reflection however I feel I should of tried to get the footage over exposed, so that it is more similar to the footage from the Nikes music video. This would have also helped trying to get the footage to seem dream like.


Harvard referencing:

DoBeDo Productions. (2016). Frank Ocean – ‘Nikes’. [Online Video]. 16 August 2016. Available from: [Accessed: 18 May 2017].

17/05/17 – Focus group of new rough cut, self evaluation

Self evaluation/reflection

This is the first proper rough cut I have made so far. I haven’t done any colour correction or started with the VHS effects yet. This is pretty much the sort of structure I will wanting to get for the final cut. There is a link to the rough cut below, it ends when the music stops as I haven’t put any of the make up scenes in yet  and just have that footage still in my edit. This link is also the rough cut I showed the focus group to feedback on.

My overall thoughts are that it is a good project but could be improved with a few changes to the editing and the pace. I feel that the smoking scene goes on for too long and that the first biking scene should be extended. As it feels a bit cut off when Luc gets off the bike.

Also feel that there is a few close ups of Luc that I could reshoot due to the focus not being great. If I were to do reshooting I would do more reshoots of the bike, having more close ups of him riding the bike not just pushing it. I feel that I should also add the VHS effect in for sure with Sam, as it will make it look like a flashback or some sort of dream like feel.

Overall I am pretty pleased with the film as for a few edits that I could adjust, and maybe a few reshoots if I have the time left over.

Focus group

After making the rough cut, I then had a focus group over my work. With having them watching it individually, with then giving feedback on my work. Saying what they liked and what they would change with the editing. With also giving advice on what to reshoot if I had the chance. This happened over the course of two lessons.

Conor- fellow student

Conor liked the video overall but felt that I should cut some of the shots down as they were too long in some places. Mainly saying that the smoking scene went for too long. Saying that you could take some of the shots out. Saying there is some shots that seem not necessary. For example having three shots of example rolling the cigarette, as they are pretty much the same. I agree with him here, where he feels the smoking scene went on for too long. As this is what I was going to do first when editing started again.

Feeling that also the last shot of the shave scene should be shortened, where Luc looks into the mirror. However I disagree with him on this one as I feel that it looks that it goes on for that long, as not every shot needs to be cut quickly and try and grab the viewers attention.

For reshooting advice he said that I should probably reshoot some of the close ups with Luc as they are out of focus. This is mainly just the bedroom scene, with also saying that some of the bedroom shots are too dark. I agree with him on this point if I am going to reshoot, I will definitely do this scene to start with.

For more reshooting he mentioned how I could of had the flame come from the lighter, I agree with him again here and its a shame that I didn’t film from the other side of Luc, getting that flame in slow motion. But I will probably not reshoot this scene as it will be probably be the only shot I will be reshooting in the smoking scene.

Mark- Teaching assistant

Overall Mark also really liked the project. Saying that personally he liked the having some of shots out of focus, saying that it has a nice effect. However he also agrees with Conor, saying that the smoking scene should be cut down. As he feels that it is a bit too slow and starts to loose him at that point.

I agree with him here where the smoking part is probably the slowest part. I will get round this by adding more of the cycling at the start whilst also having more insert shots of the cigarette and maybe more shots of Sam instead. This is probably the first place I will start when editing.

Jack- fellow student

Jack was very positive over my work. Having that there wasn’t much to improve. He thought that I have done a great job already, however after thinking over it he came back to say that he thought that maybe have the focus change back on to his mum on the last shot. He also thought that maybe a good way to end would be to have it end with the timelapse fading to black. Making it so we don’t know what happened to him.

Even though I do like this idea, I feel that it doesn’t fit with the story that I am trying to tell. I wasn’t really going for a cliffhanger I was more going for a simple story which I could expand upon with the visuals.

Johnny – fellow student

Johnny, as well as the other people of the focus group, really enjoyed my short film. Saying that even though it’s 6 minutes he didn’t get bored and wanted to know what happened next. This is great to hear as this was one of my main worries about the project due to the songs length. However for improvement he also mentioned, like jack, how I could have changed focus on to his Mum. However I feel that I will have to disagree with that due to the fact that I quite like the out of focus nature of the shot and how it’s more focused on him. Summing the story in the last shot, how its focused on him and everyone else is off his mind.

He also mentioned how I should add a shot of him trying to call his girlfriend, showing a sign of struggle. I feel that this is actually really good advice and that if I was going to film again I will shoot this scene and try and place it in the story somewhere. This makes sense from a narrative perspective as well.

Fay – lecturer

Fay mainly agreed with everyone else saying that the smoking scene should be cut down. As it slows the whole project down a lot and doesn’t add a lot with its long duration. She also agreed with me to have the biking scene longer at the beginning instead of the longer smoking scene. Saying that the biking scene looks great but doesn’t last as nearly as long as it should do. I feel that this is really good criticism and gives me great confidence with adding more of the biking into the film.

Some more advice she had was about the jump cuts in the film, saying that the ones with slow motion work really well, because of the fact that it is slow collating with the music. However the jump cuts with the real time footage don’t work nearly as well. Saying that its too jarring and doesn’t match with the rest of the song. I feel that I agree with this point and will try and find a place to either edit them out or to make the cuts longer and more slow in time with the music. The examples she gave were the sleeping bag shot and the shot where Luc gets the bag. I can fully remove the shot with Luc getting out the sleeping bag, but might have to for the shed shot make the cut longer or add a fade.

Elena – course leader

Eleana really enjoyed my piece. Saying that my actor had a really good performance and was great for this story. She also really likes the idea of having Sam with an super 8 effect over the footage. Saying that it will make it so that the audience is unsure if its a memory or a dream.

Advice mainly came from doing reshoots, saying that it may be good to have Luc have more struggle in some of the scenes. This ties in with Johnny’s point of having him trying to phone her. This advice is really compelling me to do some more shooting with Luc. This would also give me some time for reshooting as well. For more reshooting advice Elena stated that I should have more action of the gears changing on the bike or maybe Luc doing more things with bike rather than just straight forward shots. I sort of agree with this however I will be not just reshooting just for that. In reflection I feel that I should of got more insert shots of the bike rather than just the bike wheel.

Elena also gave some criticism on the editing side of my project. Saying that it should stay on for Luc longer after the text happens. This was great as I knew that there wasn’t something quite right with my bedroom, with the rhythm of the cuts. But I couldn’t put my finger on it.

Fin – fellow student

Fin had a lot to say about my final major project. Saying that he thought it was great for a student short film and could really do well. He wanted to give as much advice as he could because he really enjoyed my project.

He mentioned how the sound fade between the titles music and the shaving sound should be more obvious. I will have a look into this seeing if I could change and play around with the sound. Staying on the subject of sound, he feels that I should have the credits be silent, I disagree with this comment as I feel that the last part of the song would be a good fit for the credits. As it has no singing and just the instrumentals slowing down. Feeling that this would be a good fit with the story. And not having awkward silence at the end of the FMP.

Staying on the subject of the ending, Fin gave the suggestion to a final fade on the last shot to the credits. I really like this idea as it shows the ending of the short film, rather than it just cutting to credits. For bedroom scene he agreed with Conor that it was a bit too dark in some places where Luc had some close ups. Giving me some suggestions on if I was going to reshoot it how to light it properly without having a proper rig. This really helps as this has enabled me to start thinking about ways of reshooting the scene if I was going to do, by giving me a suggestion on how to do it. He also stated that I could just play around with colour correction seeing if I could just add more light to scene in post. He then added to this that I should have lit up the poster rip more, as he didn’t really see what it was. In reflection I feel that I should have done it more towards the light and not have Luc’s shadow over it when filming. I hopefully will be able to turn this up in post production to make it more clear what is going on.

He really liked the posters being placed in the room as well. I thought that this wouldn’t be any good and I was thinking of reshooting and taking down them, but Fin disagreed. Saying its a good way of getting into the character’s mind and what he is interested in visually, without just telling us. With reflection I fully agree with him and feel that it was a good story telling move to keep the posters up around the room.

For the opening credits he thought that I should have placed them up on the bike scene around the 2:06 mark. I understand his point but I feel that this is too far into the video for the credits to be introduced, making it jarring and not work with the film. I maybe will experiment with this point, but I am going to probably going to disregard this point. While talking about the beginning he mentions that some of the sound mixing doesn’t make that much sense, the water running being too loud compared to the rest of the shaving shots. Saying that I should turn this down. After releasing this I will make sure to turn this down, I am very glad that he mentioned the sound as I will probably would have just ignored it.

I then discussed the problem that I had not being able to fit the scene in where he questions his identity. He was also unsure on where to place this shot, saying that its hard because you don’t want it to look forced. But still being a really good idea to get some visual interpretation in there. He couldn’t really help with my problem but gave the suggestion that I should add one frame into edit of it for sure. I feel that this might be a good idea for something to experiment with. I will be thinking over the weekend on how to place this scene into my short film without it looking forced.


Overall I have really glad that I did theses focus groups, getting people’s perspective on the different aspects of my film. It has enabled me to have new ideas to improve my work and also make it stronger. It is also good to have an outsider’s look onto your work, as you might be too attached to the project to see its flaws. Most of these ideas I would never have thought of, so I am really glad that I took the time to individually show people my work in full.

With reflection I feel that I should do this at every point of the creative process. For example getting people to look at my basic concept in more detail and also look at a script giving feedback before I go away and start shooting. Meaning that I have a strong idea from the get go. I will continue to have focus groups for my reshoots (if I do any) colour correction and any more changes in editing.

09/05/17 – Editing, Elena tutorial, changing actress

Elena Tutorial

The first thing I did today was having a 1on1 tutorial with Elena. Talking about where abouts I am with my project making sure I am on task for the due date of 7th June. Elena gave some comments on my project saying so far it looks good, with some editing criticism of Luc smiling in one of the Biking shots. Saying that this took her out of the film. I have since taken this out and will make sure to have Luc with the same emotion.

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She also took a look at blog making sure that it is update with my reflection and wordpress. Elena then looked at how I laid out the blog, saying that I should place unit 8 at the top of the menu because this is the unit that will be marked.

I then asked for some advice on the theme of “change,” with my FMP. I mentioned how I feel that the break up and Luc then going on to question his identity and coming back from the woods “changed,” may go over some people’s heads. Elena then suggested that I make a visual reference to change my having the texting scene mention the word change. I will now make sure to include this in the script and have this in the edit. Due to the fact that it make more of a direct nod at theme, rather than it all being discreet.


Most of today was spent editing my FMP. I have since finished with the first main biking at the first half and have done some of the woods footage. I feel that so far that the film is coming together nicely and that the biking scene looks really good and has paid off nicely.

Here is a rough cut of the some of the footage so far, I am not very far and have not done any after effects or colour correction yet. I am trying to do a cut of what I want and then go back and do the colour correction and effects after.

A short self evaluation

I feel that so far my short film is coming along nicely, having good cinematography and having a story being told through visual medium. For things to improve I feel that I should spend some time in the later stages on colour correction, as I feel that it will make some of the scenes have better lighting and some improvement on continuity.

I feel that with the editing that there could be some improvement on the pace, having the biking scene go on for longer as this is more visually interesting. And then maybe cut down some of the smoking scene, as this is a bit too long and maybe bore people for the 6min duration of the music video.

For the bedroom scene I feel that I could have used maybe some different shots, as the ones I have used because some of them seem to be really dark in places and don’t really show their faces. I will later add the scenes with the girlfriend as this will get me a better understanding of the flow of the short film and have me be able to evaluate more heavily.

Apart from the Biking I also really liked the opening titles, of the song and frank ocean’s name. I feel it work great with a small sample of the music and having the titles appear over a out of focus bike wheel. Showing the audience what’s to come. Favourite part though is how I have made the font look very close to the font of nostalgia ultra, Frank Ocean’s first mixtape.


I feel that this is a good reference to Frank Ocean’s other work and I like the fact that you have to find out the reference, similarly to the nod of Frank Ocean’s Chanel song with the sign Luc is holding.


However there is one problem I have came across. That of the transition from the title sequence to the scene of Luc shaving. So far I feel that it is okay but is quite abrupt and a bit distracting. I might have the starting sequence fade to black and fade out the music and then have it come back with the light turning on from black.

The next thing I will do is to edit the messaging scene to make sure I don’t need to reshoot that with Luc, as this is the scene I am most wary of. I will also check with people, focus group, if I need to reshoot any of the bike scenes, because I will probably have to give bicycle back soon.

Changing actress, for the girlfriend

I have also decided to do a small rewrite of the story and change actress. I was going to have a friend of Luc’s pretend to be his girlfriend. By having him film themselves with a camera. As if it is home video. However I feel that this wouldn’t go as planned and will mostly likely be awkward as they are both not really actors, and Luc is not really good at displaying happiness when asked. This was great for the main role of the film as I wanted to someone feel emotionless rather than be trying to cry and act upset. As I feel it will just come off chessy with an non-actor doing it.

So instead I am going to ask one of the girls from my college to do a quick filming session at the back of college for 10 minutes. I will try and get the feel of the Nikes Frank Ocean video, of having the person stare into the camera with the VHS footage effects playing over top.


I will now have to make sure when cutting it is obvious that the actress is the girlfriend, because the two actors won’t be in the same frame. Tomorrow I will be recruiting actors and asking people if they would be up for doing it. I feel that this would also be good as it pays direct reference to Frank Ocean’s Nikes music video. I also feel that this would be a more creative way of showing the Girlfriend rather than just having home footage. As this seems quite cliche and too obvious to do.

I am glad that I have made this decision as I feel that it will work a lot better with the film I am trying to make. I feel that the reference to Frank Ocean is important as I am doing a music video for one of his songs.

The new concept for the FMP, using the song Seigfried, new aims and reflecting on the new idea

Today I was thinking about my new idea so that it could fit into a song that hasn’t got any swear words or explicit language. I have come up with a similar idea to the previous but with an actual progression and story. This would be the music video to the song Seigfried from Frank Ocean’s Blonde album. Seigfried is a song about a break up love story, but it is heavily hinting at a male model of which Frank Ocean dated for a short duration.

For my idea for this song I wanted Luc (the actor I will be using,) to receive a text from his girlfriend that the relationship is over. And they are no longer together. This text effect, will be inspired by the Sherlock series effect. With the text not having a bubble around it and just on its own. I feel that this would be different from the normal cliche texting you see in films all the time.

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In shock and not knowing what to do, he packs a bag with a sleeping bag and rides his bike. Trying to clear his head he finds a woods where he settles down to smoke a cigarette and lay the sleeping bag out. His Mother calls him and he just stares at the phone and doesn’t answer. He then camps the outside in the woods. He then rides his bike home the next morning to find his mum waiting outside the house for him. I will have slow motion shots of him lighting the cigarette and have some slow motion shots of him riding the bike up the hill to the woods. With also having editing effects around Luc, having some outlines around when smoking. Very much like this one below. I will also try and film lots of close ups, as this is a very personal story and the close ups in the short film will reflect that.

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This would not be the only thing I will be filming. I will also have VHS footage of Luc and his girlfriend in the past relationship. As if he is looking back on the relationship. I will show that this is in the past by having it look like 8mm film or VHS footage. I will have also have shots of Luc with angel winged make up on randomly cut into the music video. This will demonstrate as if he is questioning his own sexuality and if he is bisexual. I feel that this will add a layer of depth as it will need to be interrupted to get the full meaning. I taken inspiration for this from the Frank Ocean music video Nikes, where he is seen throughout the video wearing make up and having glitter on his face. This is him trying to show his feminine side, which is something I would like to show in my music video.

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However to improve my idea I want to expand upon the questioning of his own sexuality as I feel it’s more original and creative than having a break up story. So I may try to find more ways of including subtle hints to bisexuality. Either by having him hold up a sign saying “I see both sides like Chanel,” a reference to Frank Ocean’s song Chanel. Which is a song about bisexuality. Or something similar.

Aims for this project

My aims for this project is to make a music video which is visually interesting and tells us a story just through the visuals. Not relying on dialogue to tell every detail. I will do this by not having any spoken dialogue and have this instead be replaced by the music. I want the song to help tell the narrative I want to tell visually. Having the music support the visuals but take over and be overbearing. This is why I think it’s quite good that I have got quite a stripdown song. I would like to it also be similar to Frank Ocean’s other music videos having visual metaphors in the video.

What makes my new aims different is that I want to actually have a narrative story that people can be invested in. Which then I can jump from to expand my music video. I also like the fact that it is a very simple idea, meaning I can test myself in the technical aspects.

For the audience I am aiming for is pretty much everyone, as it really applies to everyone who has been through a bad relationship in the past. But I would also like it to appeal to Frank Ocean’s fans as there is a few visual references to his work in the music video. For genre I would say that my film is drama based, due to the fact that there isn’t a lot of action in the music video.

Reflecting on changing my idea

I feel that considering the fact that I had to change my idea half way through the project I feel that I have done it in considerable amount of time. Managing to get back on my feet and think of a new idea that will work for the FMP. I feel that my new also is alot better in comparison, this is due to the to fact that I feel the song works better and also I have a simple story I can expand upon.

I think this shows a good level of problem solving in a short amount of time. Meaning I am able to get back to making my short film. I am glad that I have kept the idea of having a Frank Ocean song as this is a major theme throughout my work filming up to the actual project. I am also still making my short film very visual, still only wanting to rely on visuals to tell the story. The reason I want to do this, is because film is a visual art form not a spoken or written one.

I feel that to avoid having to do this next time, changing my idea that is, I should have a few back up ideas that are similar to the main idea that I am running with. I should also not include any swear just to be on the safe side. Finally I feel that I should check with Elena as early as possible to check if my idea is suitable without leading it till the proposal hand in where she sees my idea for the first time.

I think what I should take away from this is that always be adaptable when making a film. As having to change something with the idea might work out for the better in the long run, with it actually improving my work. I feel that this has taught me always be prepared for idea constantly changing, even if you are three weeks away from the deadline. As this is just the nature of the film industry.

Harvard referencing:

DoBeDo Productions. (2016). Frank Ocean – ‘Nikes’. [Online Video]. 31 October 2016. Available from: [Accessed: 31 April 2017].

Every frame a painting. (2014). A Brief Look at Texting and the Internet in Film. [Online Video]. 15 August 2014. Available from: [Accessed: 1 May 2017].

FRANK OCEAN, 2016.  Seigfried. Blond.  Boy don’t cry